Alex Shapiro
IELTS ExpertIELTS Writing Evaluation
the bar chart below shows the hours per week that teenagers spend doing certain activities in
The bar chart below shows the hours per week that teenagers spend doing certain activities in Chester from 2002 to 2007
Evaluated by WRTR ORG
The bar chart provides information about the amount of time spent by teenagers in Chester on seven leisure activities between 2002 and 2007.
in bowling. The hours spent on television, going to pubs/discos and shopping a growth. By contrast, the remaining figures declined, except the hours in watching DVDs experienced a fluctuation.
As for watching television, teenagers spent 25 hours per weeks on it in 2002, after which the figure to go to pubs/discos and go shopping both at around 7 hours per week, peaked at roughly 17 hours and 15 hours
Regarding watching DVDs, the youth spent over 10 hours each week on this activity in 2002, rising to 17 hours 2 years later and falling to under the 2002 figure in the final year. from 10 hours to less than 3 hours. With a downward trend, the hours spent on bowling was lower than 4 hours during the period.
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Total Band
5.5
Coherence and Cohesion
5.5
Lexical Resource
6.5
Grammatical Range
6.5
Task Achievement