Alex Shapiro
IELTS ExpertIELTS Writing Evaluation
some believe that more action should be taken to prevent crime, while others feel that crime
Some believe that more action should be taken to prevent crime, while others feel that crime is being tackled effectively now.
Evaluated by WRTR ORG
In 's world where we in, the issue of preventing the crime seems to be getting more and more complex. A number of argue that more measures
One school of believes that in order to decline the number of crimes, more steps be taken. The pivotal aspect of this argument is that day by day the ratio of committed crimes is rising, that's why taken measures are not to halt it. reports that the number of criminals had period. crimes. be taken in order to preclude crime.
Opposing school of argues that it is unnecessary to take the steps for halting the crime on the grounds that crime is . oppose to the view that severe penalty is the best way to halt the crime, that has already provided inmates with it. Thereby, all measures are taken to crime, that it is , and these steps are
above opinions considered one is that in order to fall the number of criminals, extra measures
This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :this day and agenowadays
todayThis words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reside
liveThis words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
peopleThis words can be replaced with:willshallbe going to
shouldbe implemented
to preclude the crime, others contend that nowadays crime is being tackled
effectively
.One school of
This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reckonedassumedbelievedconsidered
thoughtThis words can be replaced with:willshallbe going to
shouldThis words can be replaced with:sufficient
enoughFor instance
, This words can be replaced with:a number of
someThis words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstrateportrayindicatedisplay
showbeen grown
dramatically
over It seems that a hyphen is missing.one-year
one yearFurthermore
, it This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :require
mustbe stated
that if severe penalty was sentenced
to criminals, there would be Did you mean "fewer"? The noun crimes is countable.fewer
lessHence
, urgent measures This words can be replaced with:willshallbe going to
shouldOpposing school of
This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reckonedassumedbelievedconsidered
thoughtbeing solved
effectively
This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :nowadays
nowIn addition
to this, Possible spelling mistake. 'sceptics' is British English.skeptics
scepticson the contrary
education is possible solution of it This words can be replaced with:therefore
soThis words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :national authoritypublic authority
governmentThis words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :preclude
preventThis words can be replaced with:therefore
soThis words can be replaced with:sufficient
enougheffectively
influenced to this issue.In conclusion
, as we have This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witnessed
seenare divided
, and my This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :possess
ownThis words can be replaced with:willshallbe going to
shouldbe done
6
Total Band
5.5
Coherence and Cohesion
5.5
Lexical Resource
6.5
Grammatical Range
6.5
Task Achievement