Alex Shapiro
IELTS ExpertIELTS Writing Evaluation
governments spend a lot of money on public celebrations such as national holidays and public
Governments spend a lot of money on public celebrations such as national holidays and public festivals. Some people say that the government spends too much on this and that they should use this money on other useful things. Do you agree or disagree?
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Total Band
6
Coherence and Cohesion
5.5
Lexical Resource
6.5
Grammatical Range
6.5
Task Achievement
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