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some people think foreign visitors should be charged more than local people when they visit the

Some people think foreign visitors should be charged more than local people when they visit the cultural and historical attraction. To what extent do you agree or disagree in country
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Some people think foreign visitors should be charged more than local people when they visit the cultural and historical attraction. in country
In this modern era, it is
extremely
essential for everyone to know the culture and history of the country, due to the fact
This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
from these folks can know the importance of their country.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letterOn
on
the contrary a number of time
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many
citizens believes that Overseas
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oughts
to charge more than residence. I completely disagree with propose
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thought
and reason for my inclination our clients through in ensuring paragraphs.

This sentence does not start with an uppercase letterA
a
plethora of country's development in Goodwill depends on the cultural
as well
as history. If any kind of discrimination by the government or local body at the time when tourist visit a historical place then it impacts on tourism and country's income.
For instance
, the German government charge more from tourist compared to local
This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
.
This words can be replaced with:on the contrary
But
after a number of time they
This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :modifyalter
change
this rule in light of the fact that it
was effected
on their International Relation with other countries and economy to.

If any government imposed this kind of any rules for foreign visitor then it
also
effects on local employment.
Because of this
rule tourist
are avoided
to visit the place
therefore
if government want to sustainable development then they ought to neutral for all
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people
.
For instance
, to increase income Indian government charge more from foreigners
however
after sometime they realize that
because of this
rule countries unemployment ratio
is increased
.

To conclude
if any country want to become developed then they ought to give equal importance to tourism
also
due to the fact it is
Use "an" instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'an
a
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only
way to
This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :ameliorate
improve
your International relation with other countries.
6.5
Total Band
7
Coherence and Cohesion
5.5
Lexical Resource
6.5
Grammatical Range
6.5
Task Achievement

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