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some people think that products should be made to last as long as possible, while others think

Some people think that products should be made to last as long as possible, while others think making the products cheap is more important. Discuss both views and express your own opinion.
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Some people think that products should be made to last as long as possible, while others think making the products cheap is more important.
When buying a product, most people weigh up price versus quality. While
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some
feel that durability should be the most
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important
feature in a product, others give affordability more importance. In this essay, I will examine both views and
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explain
why
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companies
and customers need to
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make
responsible decisions.

Those who argue that if a product lasted longer, waste could be
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reduced
.
Indeed
, it is obvious that as products become almost disposable, the amount of landfill is growing. Most people,
for instance
, do not
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use
their smart-phones for more that 2-3 years and have a tendency to
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buy
a new one even if it’s not needed. This mentality of disposing a product
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before
completion of its lifecycle can lead to unnecessary wastage of raw materials, industrial waste and can cause harm to the nature. If we
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only
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bought
one smartphone in a decade
instead
, we could
dramatically
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reduce
this impact.

For others, lower prices are more
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important
that quality.
Indeed
, compared to fifty years ago, the range of products in the market is much bigger and prices are much more affordable. A computer,
for example
,
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used
to cost thousands of dollars,
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but
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now
it
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only
costs around $300. This means more people have access to these products, which means greater equality and opportunity,
particularly
when it
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comes
to items like cars and electronics.

In conclusion
, both durability and affordability play its role in the society in a
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very
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different
fashion. While, we can never compromise on the quality of a product, I feel access of it is more
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important
. Majority of the population
still
lacks the capability of buying a product and this should be the focus for majority of the
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companies
.
6.5
Total Band
6.5
Coherence and Cohesion
5.5
Lexical Resource
6.5
Grammatical Range
7
Task Achievement

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