Alex Shapiro
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tudy the given bar graph below, which is about favourite leisure activities of teenagers in canada,
tudy the given Bar Graph below, which is about Favourite leisure activities of teenagers in Canada, this depicts the types of activities the teenagers (Age 13- 19 years are involved during their leisure time). Write the analytical paragraph in about 100-120 words:
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The bar graph represents the amount of money spent by two nations on consumer products ranging from cars, computers, books, perfume to cameras in 2010. The units
that UK and France spent the most of the money on cars while the least was spent on perfume by the UK and cameras by France.
An analysis of the data that, UK was spending above 350000 pounds sterling on cameras which was more than twofold that of France. There was a difference of 100000 pounds sterling on the spending of books by British and France While, both countries had spent an approximately similar amount of money on computers which about 350000.
With regard to perfume, 200000 pounds sterling had been spent by France which was exactly half that of the amount spent on cars. was on cars by the UK that was more than triple/thrice than perfume.
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givenare measured
in pounds sterling.Overall
, it can be This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witnessed
seenAn analysis of the data
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justWith regard to perfume, 200000 pounds sterling had been spent by France which was exactly half that of the amount spent on cars.
However
, the highest expenditure 450000 pounds (ca. 204 t) sterlingUnpaired symbol: '(' seems to be missing
)This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witnessed
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Total Band
5.5
Coherence and Cohesion
5.5
Lexical Resource
6.5
Grammatical Range
5.5
Task Achievement
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