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some people believe that it is wrong to keep animals in zoos, while others think that zoos are
Some people believe that it is wrong to keep animals in zoos, while others think that zoos are both entertaining and ecologically important. Discuss both views.
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On the one side, there is ample evidence that it is a grave misdeed to hold animals in confined public spaces. The central reason for this is two-fold,
primarily
it is morally
unjust to withhold creatures for entertainment of human beings. Exhibiting them to general population Possible spelling mistake found.in order
inorderSecondly
, it is an artificial habitat and could possibly
hamper their instincts to hunt which leads to ecological imbalance. For example
, loss of major predators in the largest forest of the world, Amazon has This words can be replaced with:admissible
allowedAlthough there is a case for zoo's impacting species diversity and promoting inhumane treatment towards them, benefits that
are reaped
from it cannot be overlooked
. This is largely
This words can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
becauseThis words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
onlyare nourished
and also
increased by nourishing and enabling them to reproduce. Additionally
, wildlife parks create hundreds of employment opportunities to local population. This drives local economy and the money raided can be utilized
for conservation projects.In conclusion
, it is unethical to cage animals for amusement of public and has ripple effect on the ecosystem. However
, it also
aids to preserve endangered species and also
generate revenue by providing jobs to localities.
6.5
Total Band
6.5
Coherence and Cohesion
5.5
Lexical Resource
6.5
Grammatical Range
7
Task Achievement
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