Alex Shapiro
IELTS ExpertIELTS Writing Evaluation
some people who have been in prison become good citizens later, and it is often argued that these
Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later, and it is often argued that these are the best people to talk to teenagers about the dangers of committing a crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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differentAmong the benefits that can
be considered
for getting help from prisoners, a couple of them are more significant. The first
and perhaps the most significant reason, having real experiences from the moment of committing a crime to the time of arrest and final punishment. They can speak well of stressful life and the guilt of a criminal's conscience, and This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstrateportrayindicatedisplay
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peopleextremely
keen to hear the stories of an ex-offender. The vivid and perhaps shocking nature of these stories is likely to have a powerful impact.Although listening to the story of modified criminals is helpful in deterring teens from committing the crime, there are several better ways to address this issue
radically
. Primarily
, parents should act as pioneers to educate children at an early age about social evils and how to avoid them. Also
, teachers at schools also
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positivebe promoted
, contributing to crime prevention.In conclusion
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different6
Total Band
5.5
Coherence and Cohesion
5.5
Lexical Resource
6.5
Grammatical Range
6
Task Achievement
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