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in twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today

In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today
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In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today
Without a shadow of a doubt, cars have a pivotal role in the transportation and
This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
's life in this era. In this area, an unanswered question is whether the people will
be needed
to cars more and more in the future, or this requirement will
This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :modifyalter
change
in the future. Despite the arguments asserting that using car
This words can be replaced with:willshallbe going to
should
decrease in the future, I believe, as do
This words can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
many
people, this demand will increase as
rapidly
as possible. In the following paragraphs, I will illustrate my perspective.

First
and foremost, the crux of the matter lies in the fact that the higher quality of lifestyle in the future causes people can afford to
This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
purchase
cars more than past. To be more specific, Not
This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
do people
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use
cars for transport
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but
also
they
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buy
the car more than one car for showing their luxurious life. My personal experience is a compelling example of this.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letterWhen
when
I was young everybody
This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploits
uses
public transportation or bicycle to go to work or other places.
On the contrary
, nowadays each person has a car and even this request is going to be more than there are
This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :this day and agenowadays
today
. Consider in family, everybody will
This form is ambiguous and can be used as past tense. Confirm that you are using the intended base form of the main verb after 'to do' as an auxiliary verb..
found
life easier by using their
This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :possess
own
car and people do not tend to
This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploit
use
public transportation or carpooling.

Another prominent motive to
be stipulated
is that government does not notice to
This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :ameliorate
improve
public transportation.
Furthermore
, environmental research findings confirm that not
This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
will this
be caused
people more confident to
This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploit
use
their
This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :possess
own
car
This words can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
also
they find it cheaper and safer.
For instance
, in my city when I want to go to work I
This words can be replaced with:willshallbe going to
should
spend two hours to reach my workplace.
In contrast
, I can achieve there in less than 45 minutes by driving my car.
“If” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
If
the government does not have any plan to solve these problems they request of using car will grow in the
next
twenty years.

Reflecting upon all the aforementioned reasons, one
This words can be replaced with:in the near future
soon
realizes that car has a crucial role in the near future.
This words can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
Because
incomes are rising all over the world, which means that in the future automobiles will be affordable for even more people.
Besides
, the government
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should
pay attention to public transportation as much as preventing to increase demand for cars.
6
Total Band
5.5
Coherence and Cohesion
5.5
Lexical Resource
6.5
Grammatical Range
6.5
Task Achievement

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