Alex Shapiro
IELTS ExpertIELTS Writing Evaluation
the pressure on school and university students is increasing and students are pushed to work
The pressure on school and university students is increasing and students are pushed to work hard when they are still young. Is this a positive or a negative development
Evaluated by WRTR ORG
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hard workingThis words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :ameliorate
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than This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
onlyIt is manifest that the overload assignments occupy a large amount of time of
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students’Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?Thus,
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interested in, and they rarely have chances to take party in the beneficial public activities. To This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :embark on the proccess of
startThis words can be replaced with:adverse
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studentsare tired
of schools and studies. This emotion will decrease the passion and efficiency during the study. Secondly
, lack of experiences in social works, will limit the horizons of these young This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
peopleThis words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :proficiencies
skillsThis words can be replaced with:on the contrary
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deprive This words can be replaced with:undergraduatescholarpupiljuniorgraduate
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as passive receptacles of predigested This words (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :thoughtsconceptsnotions
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studentsactively
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students6
Total Band
5.5
Coherence and Cohesion
5.5
Lexical Resource
6.5
Grammatical Range
6
Task Achievement
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