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we are witnessing traffic jams across all over the cities in the world.

We are witnessing traffic jams across all over the cities in the world. Some people say that increasing the price of petrol will help in reducing traffic jam. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
We are witnessing traffic jams across all over the cities in the world. Some people say that increasing the price of petrol will help in reducing traffic jam.
Significant proportion of people believe that all such as petrol should
be sold
at higher prices in order to combat with increasing traffic from all around the world. Although I
agree
that traffic jams are becoming serve problem globally
on the contrary
I do not
see
and increasing fuel as a
workable
solution.

To commence, the primary cause for traffic jams are that there are a plethora of vehicles rolling out on the roads. Since everyone wants to commute on their
own
vehicle, as private vehicles are more convenient and safer than compared to public
tranaport
.
Secondly
, in order to reach at the destination,
some
people disobey the traffic
rules
and regulations which
further
consequently
results in traffic congestion and arrogant
behaviour
of drivers. There are
many
problems that may occurs due
to bumper to bumper
traffic is noise pollution made by horns of vehicles and another problem is time wastage of the people those who have hectic schedule.

However
, there are a number of adverse effects of increasing the rates of petrol.
Even though
rising rates would not affect people of richer society
on the contrary
middle
class
family would not be able to afford the fuel such as petrol. Not
only
internationally
transported fuel would remain unused
but
also
country ought to face higher fares. Alternative solutions are available to cope with this problem such as car pooling. It
be
going to
be done
on broader level.
Government
should advise people to share car with other people, when the destination is same. Another concept on which
government
ought to focus is infrastructure of the roads shall be state of an art.

In conclusion
, although rolling out of a multitude of vehicles on road cause traffic jams
but
rising the amount of petrol is not a viable solution of this problem.
However
, it can
be solved
by car pooling or improving the condition of the roads.
6
Total Band
6
Coherence and Cohesion
5
Lexical Resource
6.5
Grammatical Range
5.5
Task Achievement